Ted ,great job, once again. Having read Andrew’s books recently made the story that much more enjoyable. I was also impressed with the Stonewall Jack storyline. I know Bea really pushed your patience in this one but it was well worth it. I also made sure to recommend Andrew’s trilogy in my review because without his good work this story wouldn’t have been possible
Once again excellent addition. I’m sure you’re getting ready for the summer season. It won’t be long. It’s already pushing 90F here, so it shouldn’t be much longer now for you. Scott
Email Subject; Re: Made for TV
Thanks for the great review of the new book, I might have been able to do the story without Andrew’s book BUT having said in a review of one of them that it had the makings of a good TV drama … I asked Andrew for permission and we batted the idea around for a few messages which helped focus me on Rags to Riches story rather than Holding Briefs.
Bea wasn’t too bad really. Although she was a bit tangential at one stage and I had to chop quite a bit of the story out. It was Rags wanting to tell another story that was the problem! Then Fran and Jerry were on at me … and the ‘foundationers’ who you’ll get to meet one day soon.
It looks like the weather starts to change next week … so I’ll have to get busy on the pool and the garden (or get Jerry to do it!!)
This is the one that might have been out of sequence, but it appears to have a sequel in preparation.
We meet Penny Bristol, a young woman with known but suppressed magical talent, standing outside a church in New Orleans. She is supposed to be attending a magical retreat. Somehow the dates have gotten confused. Preparations for a battle between good and evil are underway. The question is who’s side should be on?
After having accidentally helped to turn a coven of witches into zombies she ends up hiding in a cupboard while a pitch battle rages around her. Being found by a self declared ‘good guy’ another young woman dressed in leather armed with a gun and sword she survives and is taken into the care of an older couple of ‘mages’ (magicians).
From then on we follow her tale as she tries to return to her old life, correcting the grammar on public notices with her friend Veronica, for example. However, her magic won’t let her and soon the corrupt Magicians Guild of Seattle have her in their sights.
Pace, humour and a strong internal logic hold this well written story together. A very entertaining read I’ll give it
A Good Read
I then followed back to the parent series, starting with;
Born in Fire (Fire and Ice Trilogy Book 1)
By KF Breene
The lead character in this series is a certain leather clad, sword wielding, female Super Natural Bounty Hunter, Reagan. As you may have surmised this is the same self proclaimed ‘good guy’ who appears in Natural Witch.
There is far more to Reagan, as learn across the rest of the series …
and that is a problem with trying to do a review of a series like this. The books are pretty well continuous and to review Fused in Fire without giving spoilers on the earlier stories is rather tricky. So I won’t go there other than to say that the journey to the Cracks of Doom in Fused in Fire is very derivative of the Lord of the Rings, not that that is a bad thing in its self!
If you enjoy magic, dragons, vampires and unicorns with a bit of violence and a twist of humour …. You should find the whole trilogy worth the read!
Three Good Reads!
All four KF Breene stories are free for Kindle Unlimited.
Just to prove that not everything gets a rave review
The Hundred Grand Banana (A Raucous Giles Curtis Comedy)
The third Mirror Earth series from the prolific pen of Paul Z Walker. This tale of travel between largely benign friendly worlds, all called Earth takes a twist and arrives at the beginning. Meanwhile the wicked Prof Holgar, the principle of the Laboratory where we started (on ‘our’ Earth) is still in pursuit of his dinosaurs that live on the first Mirror Earth. Add in strange ‘going ons’ at Ayers Rock, flowers with power and data, a few Aliens and we are dashing across curved, distorted time and Space with out rockets or pockets!
What a fabulous story, told through the eyes of one woman the story of the ‘Night Witches’ an all female bomber regiment of the Russian army from the start of the German invasion of Russia to the fall of Berlin.
It is a well written and captivating romance set against the barbaric background of the bloodiest fighting of World War 2. Both Katya and Vanna are serving as fliers in the Russian forces in separate war zones, so this is a long distance affair!
The strength of the female characters when confronted with deprivation, humiliation, hatred and violence, and all that from their comrades in arms, is impressive.
I enjoy this story from almost the very beginning to almost the very end.
I’ll give it 4+ Stars
The second story from the Kindle Family Share is set over much the same period of history is:
Set in France during the second World War this book follows the lives of two sisters as they struggle to survive under the brutal Nazi regime that followed the fall of France in 1940.
The murderous attacks on the refugees escaping the fall of Paris, the treatment of the Jews and Communists and their transport to the concentration camps. The appalling hardship of the women left behind, the lack of food and energy for cooking and heating.
One sister struggling with a family to protect, the other, the black sheep, trying to fight back. In the background the father who was destroyed by the 1914-18 conflict and was unable to care for his girls. The young communist criminal prepared to kill any and all who try to stop him.
An ending worthy of being called an ending making the difference.
A great mixture of fantasy and eco-warrior features in a story of a couple that nothing goes wrong for, except being childless, until a coven of witches arrive next door.
But then the unexpected starts to happen around the couple, not too them but around them. This is despite the efforts of the witches next door …. There is a nice twist at the end too.
Well written and engaging I liked this story.
Father Al Takes a Vacation: Book One (Father Al’s Voyage of Discovery Trilogy)Father Al Celebrates a Birthday Milestone: Book II
Starts off with a good idea …. worn out priest seeks change of life … goes on a nude cruise (through space) It actually delivers the plotline in the end.
However I found the detailed description of the theology and the actual words of the littany went on too long. Later in the story I found the dialogue getting a little bit too childlike.
It probably deserve a 4* rating but it left me unconvinced.
Then book two gets worse and worse ….. Childish dialogue, no real plot sorry 65% read I gave it up!
Marks of the Forbidden (Defenders of the Earth Book 1)
No Peace in Exile (Defenders of the Earth Book 2)
The Windigo (Defenders of the Earth)
by Olaf Danielson
If you have time to fill with some fantasy fiction
Book one was …A different type of super hero to save the world aided by a different kind of super heroine.
Tattooed warriors against a rogue state…
It is an awkwardly paced action story but managed to hold it together long enough to keep me reading
Book two was … more of the same
Book three was ….Poor, the whole emphasis of the book in terms of characters has switched from the Defenders and the Volva to the Choosers. There were also huge sections of philosophical discourse rather than action, which is a bit confusing for what started as an action story series.
The action when it happens is world shattering …. and pretty fatal.
I was also disappointed that story threads are deliberately started and then just abandoned Another series starting off with a promising premise going down hill….
“Looking forward to winter” … That’s a very strange thing for a naturist to write you might think.
Actually I am already looking forward to the coming summer; the sun, the warmth, the long evenings … Now that is the catch in this modern day and age.
I write on my lap top.
Lets face it copy typing a long hand manuscript is never going to be my forte. The “Typex” (a special white paint that you used to hide mistakes on typewritten pages) bill would be astronomical. I would still have to scan the pages to digitise the output. So I write on my laptop.
When I say write …. I am talking about transferring the silly ideas from my head to an electronic page via the first finger of each hand. Back to the lap top.
The problem with a laptop in summer is I want to be outside in the sun. Outside in the sun is where I get some of my less silly ideas. Sadly because of the bright light I can’t recognise mistakes as I make them on the computer screen. So the arrival of the earlier sunsets of November through to March means I can start transcribing brain waves to a PDF.
I might just get the next Uncovered Policeman story finished by Christmas , then there is another couple of half formulated short stories and vague thoughts for a sixth Rags and Bea adventure.
The Cookery Book … I am the genuine Naked Cook, ask anyone who ate at the Quinta da Horta 2011-13 if I am any good
Proof reading is an attempt to over come the Pareto principle that is the “law” that says 80% of your errors will get picked up by your word processor but 20% wont. It also means that while 80% of the changes are correct 20% are actually new errors.
Confused? I am ! So on to the practicalities of why proof read and why it might not be a good idea.
It is interesting to read some of the comments turning up on the Amazon Reviews of my stories. Quite a few refer to the need for proof reading. I accept that my spelling is appalling and my finger (yes a one-digit typist) is often over taken by my imagination and words get missed.
Now here is the rub, if Word fails to point out a mistake, how am I supposed to spot that I have made one?
This is a comment from a review, it is of another authors work but the same person review one of my books.
“I have read many hundreds of books (fiction and non-fiction and mostly not erotic) and the vast majority of them were grammar and punctuation perfect. So I think it’s a pity that erotic book authors don’t take more care because I believe it must have an adverse effect on their sales.”
This is where we, in my opinion – feel free to decry me, hit the big problem.
As far as I am aware none of the authors of naturist fiction (#naturistfiction) are actually making a living out of their naturist fiction. It is a part-time endeavour even a hobby. I think most of us write for our own enjoyment initially then decide to share it. Something that has become possible via Amazon’s KDP, Goodreads and Smashwords.
So, to proof reading. looking for mistakes in an existing piece of writing has to be done by a new set of eyes. Remember Pareto is watching you 20% of your corrections will be extra errors! It takes a lot of effort to carefully read ,, word by word,line by line looking for mistakes rather than enjoying the story. I am lucky I had a volunteer for the Uncovered Policeman Abroad and my wife is a “finisher-completer” and had the time to do the Uncovered Policeman; In and Out of the Blues. Otherwise you pay a specialist. This is great if you have a publisher. They will deduct the cost of proofing, editing or buying you a cup of coffee while arguing about artistic integrity of a phrase, out of your advance on the copies they expect you to sell.
Well, I am planning a party to which you are all invited when the first of my stories sells its 500th unit. (Bring your own bottle, I’ll provide the pork scratchings.) If I had paid for proof reading by a professional I would not be able to afford the pork scratchings until I had sold 700 books and what sort of party would that be? Hey we are having a really big party, after all you are only 47 years old once … nope it doesn’t work.
“OK Ted, do you have a solution?” You ask.
Well, sort of. Most of the #naturistfiction authors (I’m a story teller not an author by the way) seem to be approachable. It is rare not to find an e-mail address in the blurb around the story. Review the story, the writing style and how you felt about the reading experience. Then if you have found specific errors send the writer a nice e-mail pointing out the errors. I am sure most will change the manuscript to correct these mistakes. One of the big joys of these electronic publications is that they can be changed almost daily unlike a printed book.
One word of warning never, never try to correct a plot line! You may discuss why the author chose that path but don’t correct the plot if you want to live long enough to come to the 500th Book Party.